Todd C Perrin
University of Iowa
Engineering Writing Styles
The purpose of an engineer is to solve problems through a
process. To be an engineer one must be able to handle all the complication that
come up during that process, doing so requires an engineer to be knowledgeable
in several different fields. One such field is writing. Effective communication
through writing is crucial for engineers to produce and recreate results. Knowledge
in the field of writing is the gateway into effective communication between
fellow engineers. As an engineering major in my freshman year of college, I hope
to become knowledgeable in the different types of writing styles present in an engineer’s
daily life. I have read, analyzed, and compared 4 different engineering
reports, 2 academic and 2 nonacademic, in order to acquire a better understanding
in these types of writing styles. The different writing styles in engineering all
include concise, sophisticated explanations of advanced topics, similar
structure as to allow for ease of reading and referencing, and a clear
conveyance of the purpose or bigger picture found in their studies.
Academic and Nonacademic Writing Styles in Engineering
In the academic and nonacademic writings of engineers,
common themes start to surface as one begins to study them. One such themes is how
each paper is structure. The structure is crucial in academic engineering writing
as it allows for the audience to understand the specific detail that the writer
is trying to convey. These specific details are often the main results and real-world
applications found in the experiments conducted by the author. Another theme
present in each paper is brief concise language that helps deepen the
understanding of the purpose of the article. Using brief concise language is
critical in engineering academic writing so other engineers to reference them for
their own experiments. Language is key in how the message of a passage is
conveyed to the reader. This is holds true for engineer writing as the message
and findings are how engineers communicate through academic writing. One final
theme present in engineer writing is bias. Bias in engineering writing is
difficult as it changes based on the topic of the report. If the purpose of the
report is to be informative then the bias of the author should be kept minimal
and only stated in the closing remarks of a report. However, if the purpose of
the report is to be influential then the bias of the author must be present throughout.
The bias of an author also depends on whether the writing is academic or not. All
these themes present within the academic and nonacademic writings of engineers
help to create well-written reports that further communications throughout the
field.
Structure
Academic writing in engineering, no matter the specialty,
remains the same as to allow for all manner of engineers to understand and reference
any journal or article written by an engineer. The structure of academic writing
of each paper includes an introduction followed by experimental data and processes
used then concluded with the real-world application. In Davidson, May, Monahov’s
(2018) review of lead batteries, the structure is laid out as a comparison of
lead-acid to other batteries on a basis by basis format starting at the overview
of the technologies present in both. The structure of this paper is helpful as
it presents first baseline data on both objects under comparison without bias. This
baseline data allows the article to be read by anyone with a basic concept of
chemistry and mathematics rather than just those select few chemical engineers
that focus on batteries. Overall the article is significantly longer than most
other academic sources but that is due to the nature of a review. An academic
review will be longer with more details and thorough explanations of all the
information brought up.
Concise Language and Data
Within the field of engineering the ability to convey your
findings and expertise on a subject without it being hidden behind long and
confusing reports is important. The purpose of an engineer is to solve problems
but that problem solving can be extremely difficult if the information that an
engineer needs is hidden behind a wall of useless symbolism and text. In order
to streamline the information processed within a report, concise language is
needed. A good example of this streamlined data is within Sakyi and Lu’s (2019)
report on the model for replications of moveable robots. Within this report,
Sakyi and Lu use language devices such as figures and data tables to help
illustrate their point as well as paragraphs such as
“A robot is created with very similar
mechanisms. A distinctive robot has a movable body, a mechanical device, a
sensor, a power source and a CPU “brain” that regulates all of these
components. Fundamentally, robots are artificial forms of bodily life - they
are machineries that imitate human and animal behavior or conduct.”
(p. 1)
Which uses clear concise language
that helps to introduce the topic of their reports as well as create their
personal arguments and create an inner voice that will carry on through the
remainder of the article. The language that Sakyi and Lu uses is simple yet inventive
and creates an educated tone continues through the article. One such example on
the nonacademic side of engineering writing comes in Wiley’s (2020) article
on the journal in which the author explains the uses of certain chemicals in
batteries such as “triethyl phosphate.…This substance is known as a flame
retardant.” This explanation while seemingly mundane allows for a greater
audience to be reached and cuts down on outside research that needs to be done.
Had the article not explained what triethyl phosphate then it would have left
the readers confused and taken the focus away from the main point of the
article. The article doesn’t over explain either. Had the article explained the
production or chemical formula of triethyl then the audience would have gotten
information not directly related to the main point of the article. This use of
clear concise language allows for a greater understand of the main point given
by the authors of the article.
Bias
Bias
in the field of engineering is not as simple as other fields such as create
writing or philosophy where the focus of the field is of bias. When dealing with
informative writing such as most academic articles within the field of
engineering, the use of bias is not common. Because the purpose of these articles
is to be informative, authors try to without their bias of the topic in the
article until the concluding remarks section of each academic journal. One such
example is present within May, Davidson, Monahov (2018) review of lead batteries
where the main content of the article is informative and only because bias in
the concluding remarks section where the make statements such as
“Lead batteries have
a long history of use in utility energy storage and their capabilities and
limitations have been carefully researched. Their reliability is well
established and they can be adapted for a wide range of duty cycles within this
sector which will continue to ensure they provide a good solution that is
competitive to other approaches” (p. 157)
This is the closing paragraph towards
the whole review and in it the bias of the author comes out in which they
endorse the use of lead-acid batteries. This bias is important as it is built
upon the facts and sources brought up by the authors throughout the article. Had
the bias been introduced within the first sections of the article, the
credibility of the authors would have gone down and the audience would be less inclined
to believe them but because the bias is introduced at the end of the article
and had been slowly and suble built up by the facts presented, the audience is
more likely to agree with them.
Nonacademic
engineering writing differs greatly from this, however. The focus of most nonacademic
engineering writing is to persuade an audience as well as inform them upon a
study that was done and reported on in an academic article. As such, nonacademic
article will start out by trying to convince the audience as to why a certain
study is important and how it will directly relate to the real world and
common people. A good example of this is in the article written by Jo Napolitano
(2020) about the DOE/Argonne National Laboratories research on the mystery of
photosynthesis, in which the author writes that “scientists are now closer than ever
to being able to design electron transfer systems in which they can send an
electron down a pathway of their choosing.”. This quote does nothing to
inform the public of the accurate result of the research but rather creates an
exciting almost false sense of accomplishment without stating any fact at all.
This bias in nonacademic writing is used to convince the audience to support and
further fund the research done by the DOE.
Conclusion
The
different writing styles in engineering allow for the effective communication between
the different fields of engineering as well as towards the general public. In
order to achieve this effective communication, an article must contain an easy
to understand structure, clear and concise language and a bias that helps to convey
the bigger picture or general message that is present within each article. Effective
communication is the key to being successful in the field of engineering.
Works Cited
Davidson,
A., & May, G.J., & Monahov, B. (2017, November 15). Lead batteries for
utility energy storage: A Review. Journal of Energy Storage. Retrieved February
10, 2020 from https://reader.elsevier.com/reader/sd/pii/S2352152X17304437?token=EC52B8A17C540606B645EDA3AA67C035B3C706681E77025943615D9B62CD94E28830FFEB22A8AC188642DC04B3B33745
Napolitano, J. (2020, February
5). Scientists unravel mystery of photosynthesis. ScienceDaily. Retrieved
February 10, 2020 from www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2020/02/200205132347.htm
Sakyi
& Lu (2019, February 28). The Efficient and Tentative Model for Extenics Replications
of the Moveable Robots. The Open Mechanical Engineering Journal. Retrieved
February 10, 2020 from https://www.benthamopen.com/FULLTEXT/TOMEJ-13-1
Wiley. (2020, January
31). Safe potassium-ion batteries: Nonflammable electrolyte for
high-performance potassium batteries. ScienceDaily. Retrieved
February 10, 2020 from www.sciencedaily.com/releases/2020/01/200131114739.htm
Todd, as we talked about, this essay has fantastic content, it just needs to be elaborated on. In this peer review, I will provide you with a few suggestions for your structuring/formatting, as well as some content suggestions. If you take an hour or so to work on these points I highlight, I believe your paper will be at a great place
ReplyDeleteFirst off, your organization needs to be addressed. In your essay, you combined your Academic and Nonacademic content. While this is ok, there were several points where I didn't know which section I was reading over. I would recommend either adding secondary headings such as "Academic Language", or splitting the content into two separate sections. This would give the audience an idea of what goes where.
As far as structuring goes, be sure to add your last name before all the page numbers, and unbold your title. Review the paragraph for some various punctuational errors, but focus on content first.
Hem stressed that he would like to see 3 examples or analyzations for each rhetorical device, so for content, just go through and elaborate a bit more on each point. On some long paragraphs, find a good point to split into two different points and be sure to elaborate on each.
As I said, this is very well written overall and should not be extremely difficult to fix up. Well done!
My overall thoughts on your essay is that it's a great base. I think that there are a few things you can change that will greatly improve your essay.
ReplyDeleteTo begin, structure. Structure is one of the biggest things you could improve one. I felt the essay was hard to follow because it was all clumped into one. I think the information was all there, but separating it could be of use to the reader. I would suggest separating academic and non academic, them making subsections for language, bias and structure.
Another thing you could improve on are a few things, like centering the cover page. There are a few grammar mistakes that I circled. All just typical rough draft stuff to make sure you paper is polished.
Lastly, I think that you could improve your word choice. It could make your paper more interesting. I wold suggest going through and searching for words you could replace. However, be careful of wordiness.
Good work!